break~my~heart

hi, I'm ash, and I thought I'd drop in and review ;) I put corrections or ideas in bold beside your poem :D Dungeons Dungeons are places No comma (w) ...

oh my god, I love this. It actually left me speechless. Oh, my god. It's so mysterious and beautiful. and dark hehe well, anyways, I don't have much to add ...

Buried I feel the rain. It falls on my body, Tracing my every outline Like memories past, Coming back from the dead, Flooding into my every fiber, Breaking the walls ...

thanks everyone for the critts :D Hopefully, I'll edit this or do something with it haha oh yeah, Blink, when I said, "Your name is Loneliness, It is now forever ...

Unreachable Carry me, rock me, Surround me, kiss me, Like bittersweet melodies swirling amidst me. You brush my lips As I speak your name aloud. You will never leave me- ...

Hello there! Ash here to crit :D Hmm, let's see, first off, I liked this. It was simple, and imaginative. You describe boredom..well... beautifully. haha I never thought I'd be ...

Honestly, dooeywhateveryournameis up there! How can you be so harsh? I'm sure she either didn't know, or will get to it as soon as she can. Geez, just massacre her, ...

I really liked this! I think it gets your feelings across really well, and it flows nicely. You could so make this into a song! I would listen to it ...

Hi there, angles-symphony! ash here to crit since my points have dipped dangerously low. And I have no idea why either! I had like 600 something and then poof! gone! ...

this is a poem dedicated to a recent crush of mine, after i wrote it i was able to understand more of how i felt. I see your face now ...

here's part 2 :) I think this one is a little bit longer though *** I smiled sweetly. "Why, you're so welcome, Mae! It's so nice to see you again ...

Ok, here it is, but I'm not so sure I like it. But I have promised myself that I AM going to finish it haha oh yea, crits are much ...

This was for my novel Killer, however I decided not to continue it, but here ya go anyways :D Black screen Teenage boy's voice: "What if..... the Killer was the ...

you know you're a writer when you sit here and read every single one of these posts just to make sure you're a writer :D

a pessimistic, bitter man sneering at everyone else and sporting a snobbish hat. that was retarded, but that's what i though of haha break~my~heart