break~my~heart

um, I just read a book that was told in present tense, so lately I've been catching myself using this in my story. I just read over this chapter and ...

hi there :) nice poem, but on to the review: I am for you an illusion – Without appearance; without shape, Unseen and forgotten and frozen in time Hidden within ...

Ooh, I really liked this! It was really neat :) anyways, it flowed really well and everything, but something you might add is what the fire and ice represent? It ...

this was nice, It brought something new here, and was really quite refreshing. See the moon from near Wander without fear This is just a thought, but "from near" might ...

wow, this. is. good. I love the first stanza, especially. It's beautiful, your words. I like the third stanza too, the time and the clock. I don't really have anything ...

aah, just like your last poem (that I just finished reviewing) you did not disappoint me :) This one was beautiful also. Unlike the last one however, you have no ...

oh my gosh, this is beautiful!! I love it! It paints a perfect picture. I can see him just sitting there strumming aahh haha anyways, you work well with emotions ...

Uncertainty I d on't know if you're true ; I don't want to cry . I'm not sure I am too, but I'd love to try . Try what? To ...

hi there! ash here :) comments are in bold below. However there aren't but a few, since I have almost nothing to critique with this wonderful piece. My heart is ...

ello there! ash here :) so, on to your review, I liked this idea behind the poem. It was refreshing and it actually made the reader think, unlike so many ...

ello, Blair! I'm ash, nice to meet you haha welcome to YWS! Hope you enjoy it :) Looking forward to reading your work, til then, -ash

hiya! I'm ash, nice to meet you :) Hope you like YWS and find everything ok. I would offer my assistance, but I think you're covered haha Looking forward to ...

hello! welcome to YWS :) I'm ash, nice to meet you. About the procrastination thing- yeah, I know exactly what you mean. I used to do the same exact thing! ...

wow, this poem is great! It really is quite refreshing. It's so different, and definitely well written :) I love how it turns out that you are actually the one ...

h, I'm ash :) corrections or ideas will be in bold :) explanation. I wrote. So can't firgure out the rhythm? Look how in every other line the last word ...