break~my~heart

oh wow. This is some seriously epic stuff here. I can't believe no one's commented yet! ok, so anyways, I only have ONE nitpick =) I pray my lungs can ...

Oh, and I forgot to say: Thank you, everyone!! :D -ash

A poem can be as short as the writer wants to make it.. Hey it's yours, and no one can tell you how to write ;) -ash (that sounded kinda ...

Remember the time we watched the fireflies? On the white porch swing before summer's amber skies? Fingers shyly twined 'round one another, we gazed at the soft, stirring light, as ...

hello there :) crits are in bold The best of the best have sleepless nights ; They can’t evade his grip , so tight (took out the "just". kinda helps ...

hello there :) I liked the second poem especially... it was sweet. The only thing I disagree with is your non-use of punctuation. If you don't understand where to put ...

thanks everyone :) I'll get round to it pretty soon -ash

hello there =) I really liked your poem. It flows perfectly, seriously- awesome rhythm =) I just have one little nitpick- line one: The rage it builds; it grows in ...

This was seriously funny :D There was hardly anything wrong at all, except a few comma mistakes (of which I'm too lazy to point out right now... sorry =P but ...

My Scar Hello..This poem is currently under construction since I couldn't figure out how to delete it :? I'm editing it now though! -ash

I really liked this, and I liked that kept the rhyme instead of free verse. It's one of the things that make this particular poem interesting. haha I liked the ...

aah, get right on it :D thanks -ash

wow, this place is bare. :? well, I have something for you to review! here tis: (hehe) so there ya go :) thank you -ash

Ok, I wrote this in a big hurry for wisemann's poetry contest, so it's pretty bad. I think I was trying too hard. anyways, here ya go :) (oh, and ...

hello :) I liked this poem alot. I only have a few nitpicks, but before I start, I love your first two stanzas! lol ok, anyways. first nitpick: show me ...