brassnbridle

This might not be your favorite part, but I think it's necissary. At least for me, I know I get frustrated when too many of the character's questions get left ...

Definitely... Interesting. I must admit, I've never read a book where the main character dies in the first chapter. :) Now, I want you to know this- you have a ...

This is funny and sad at the same time. Your eight year old has remarkably good vocabulary! Congrats on getting him/her interested in writing at such a young age. The ...

This was very neat! I love the fact your characters spoke in old english, even if not exactly proper. It gave your story a very different feel from most of ...

First, I thoroughly enjoy this piece. So if you ever find you need/want something else to work on, continue this and let me know. I love your MC and how ...

First- under normal circumstances you just hit tab. You can't indent on YWS- at least I've never seen it. Don't ask me why. And giant blocks of text very easily ...

Your writing is pretty solid and it flowed well- that part was very good. No grammar or punctuation errors that I caught. *Cerian is the MC's arch nemesis *Araminta is ...

I just want to say- if you publish this, let me know where. I'm really enjoying this - keep it up. As for the review- I felt he acted younger ...

This was very interesting- I enjoyed it alot. I'm not the type who usually thinks much about what's going through the bad guys' heads, but I think you did a ...

Ok I just wrote an entire review and was about to submit it when it disappeared, so I'm ticked. Now, I did get a slight Percy Jackson feel, but considering ...

Its interesting, all right. I'm curious enough to see what happens next. I have to admit, though, that I didn't find myself overly heartbroken at the deaths of the two ...

I have to admit, I wasn't very hooked on the story until you mentioned her performing magic. After that I was very interested to see how it panned out. I ...

I enjoyed it. At first I was totally puzzled as to why what was going on was, but those kind of questions are what keeps a reader reading. (If that ...

Definitely needs excitement and detail, I got to agree. JK didn't go more than a couple pages at the most without something exciting or intriguing happening. Also, try to crispen ...

I agree about needing to get into your character more, but I like the tone you established. Just build upon it! I'd like to see more in-depth work with the ...