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I love, love, love this piece! You had me memorized right from the start, I could not stop. Just wonderful, amazing. So, I'm guessing Lewis had alzimers? (sp?) So sad. ...

Hello! I'm Born, and I'll be reviewer for today. (: First off, NAAAW! The cuteness factor has flown through the roof.

Hey there! You've gotten some really good reviews before me, but I'll just put in my opinion. This was good, emotional, and probably a lot of teenage girls can relate ...

Woah. The emotion in this is powerful. It made my insides feel all tight, and my heart sort of skip a beat. This is great. I love it. Only thing ...

I absolutely love this! It's so sad, but cute. You can really feel the connection between the two characters and the emotion behind it. You have such a way with ...

This is really cute and sweet. (: made me smile at some parts and just think, 'Awww!' But, there are a few things to make this better. Such as; "We're ...

This is just too cute.

Hello there! I think you've got a pretty good start to this story. It might be able to be made longer or more in depth? Or is this just the ...

This is really good - you have a very interesting plot but, it needs a tad bit of work. My advice? Read it out loud to yourself. I always find ...

Oh my word. :O This was really well written. Well done. (: Wow. This was...gruesome. But, I LIKE! :D I was just slightly confused. She didn't die, did she? Everyone ...

This seems so unrealistic. And too...out there? I mean if a persons father molested his kid, the kid wouldn't blab it 'round school like that. I don't even think they ...

I once was told by a famous author the thing they hate most is, '..and then I woke up. It was a dream.'. He told me that if you entered ...

It's too short, and the sentences are too choppy. If you read a story you want it to flow, and let the words roll of your tongue, whereas here, I'm ...

I agree with the other two replys. To make the hurt more believable, why don't you add in a fond memory or two? And then at the end come back ...

I think you need to put a bit more emotion into it. It seems a bit superficial. Get into your MC, and feel as though you have just lost your ...