borntobeawriter

Hey Ella! Thanks for Pming me about your chapter. One again, I loved your very visual style of writing. I loved that we got insight into the mother's head. I ...

Hey Jayleigh! Thanks for telling me about chapter 11! Jayleigh, I loved this chapter! I just have to say that the change from one 'moment' to another was confusing. One ...

Ha! Jayleigh, I loved this chapter! The only nitpick I found was minor: I tried grasped the wall of the shower To grasp? Grasping? But that was it! Keep them ...

Hi Ella! Great read! I have only a few comments, not really nitpicks. It was raining at the airport. Fat grey droplets pouring down from an invisible shower head I ...

Hey, thanks for inviting me to do your critique, I really appreciate it :D ok, here goes. Hannah's my classmate in college. We're really close being that she is Karen's ...

I am still a fan of yours, that is for sure. As for Tristan, there isn't much to say, yet. He seems to be attached to Rose, seems to be ...

Hi! My name is Tanya, I found your story very intriguing, very interesting. The only thing I would like to nitpick about is the fact that you are telling us ...

Hi, I have nothing to nitpick on. I read the Twilight series, and even the chapters from Edward's perspective on Stephenie Meyers website. I am intrigued by where you are ...

Hi! I loved it, loved the descriptions and the characters but I really have to reiterate what I said: it sounds like the Mortal Instruments. I'm sorry but I had ...

Hi Pink!! It's pretty good. I really enjoyed reading it. I have a question though: Have you read the Mortal Instruments? Because your story sounds strangely similar... It's funny because ...

Ok, last chapter tonight. Much like Kate before me, I read everything in one sitting. I had been at chapter 5 but I reread everthing from the start because you ...

Hi again, it's been busy for me tonight, reading your chapters :D I couldn’t swallow all that had happened within moments in my bedroom. Corrigan showing up out of no ...

Love it! Your characters and story really pull me in. YOu should see me butt on the edge of my seat, my eyes inches away from my computer screen, reading ...

Hi Jayleigh! I have to agree with PinkShearwater about the god Father part. Other than that, I love it! We had agreed that in the previous (fifth) chapter we had ...

Hi Jayleigh! I love this story and I can't wait to figure out who 'Breena' is. I can't wait to figure out the story, period. I haven't been online much ...