booklover

That was amazing. It made it seem as if you're seeing it. You have talent.

Ok. The plot is interesting, but it seems like Twilight only told from the Vampire's point of view, so work on that. It also seems predictable, except for the "I ...

This plot is thrilling. I can't wait for the next chapter! Your character description is very good, but[vivacious teal eyes] sounds a little odd. Most people will never see teal ...