blonde&confused

Hi just read your poem and thought I'd attempt a review. I liked your general idea and there were some really good lines such as the first two. Your rhythm ...

Hi, thank you all very much for your replies. I know you all said that i should lengthen it, but as it is supposed to be an epitaph (which is ...

Very vivid and quite horrific description (in a good way). I do think though that there doesn't seem to be much structure as to how you lay it out. That ...

Well the actual story behind this is that it is what a person who's dying of a disease is saying to their partner. Basically they don't want their partner to ...

thanx 4 the advice!

Don;t worry, i wrote this poem ages ago and no one seems to get what it's about. It's supposed to be about love and that it makes you insane as ...

thanx for the advice. il look out for that book. and yeah i know that the start is a bit dry, but it gets a lot better as it goes ...

thank u so much!

thanx for the advice. il keep it in mind when writing the next one.

o rite, thanx for clearing that up 4 me. and i do sort of agree with what you were ssaying about teenage angst being a bit rubbish. i certainly don't ...

yeah i agree that its repetitive, so il work on that. r u sure about the apostrophe in owner's being wrong, because it is actually the owner's words (i.e. possesion) ...