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I agree with Nate , the first part seemed plain , as though you were an estate agent describing a village to some buyers, but dont feel poo, after that ...

BAD. only kidding, heheheh. This was really well done , i loved the setting;The moon cast a faint light all over the grassy moor. The rider could see nothing through ...

Oh and i just remembered , the person who had a telephone for an avater , you wrote loads for a review too so same goes for yoo, ( thankyou).

BlOODY MOOSE! , cheers jigsaw! , ( message for fishr, i know you wrote more feed back but i didnt want to freak you cause this is how i usually ...

"Take out the rubbish Omar" She said in a hessitant Tone, knowing this comment will start a fight. "Its bloody ten O'clock, I'll get mugged you stupid woman, you know ...

ok, ill start with the bad stuff, it was too complicated and the descriptions were hard to make out, but it wasnt all bad, although i didnt understand the descriptions ...

By the time im twenty or forty or whatever, and have a job writing, and have been training for years, i would be pleased, even thrilled to be able to ...

this was great, i wanted to write somthing like this , somthing to show whats going on in the parts of the world that the news dosent cover. but when ...

like it!ten times better than the last.

Your description was extremely vivid , in one sence this was good but you should let your readers immaginations breath, let them build up some parts in there own mind+you ...

right ill change that . ill also take some time to improve it. thanks for the comments :)

Artemis fowl..its sweet and nutritious

sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet! hi wolf girl, so dragons exist huh...i saw a newt once but thats all the evidence ive got to offer...anyway , welcome to the site, youll probably still be ...

it wasnt chilling but it did have a creepy effect, it was deep and had many stong words but i think you should describe the suuroundings more cause i couldent ...

im sorry for using the c.r.a.p word but im going through the worst writers block ever and my work just seems like a jumble of poo no matter how i ...