blackmist_riverfrost

Thank you everyone who has reviewed my work. I am currently having a major writer's block and can't think of anything else to write onto this story though. It stinks!!!!

Ok, I fixed it. So here is the revised version: Carter Adams, an unwanted teen of nineteen years, walked down the busy sidewalk of Cincinnati, looking at the people talking ...

Thank you for the review Billy. It is greatly appreciated. I edited all mistakes I found and added in anything you said that would sound better in it.

I thought it was very nice, but maybe try to add in some emotion other than wonder. Other than that, very nice.

It sounds good to me. Although, not all populars are like that... Maybe you could put that in there somewhere?