blackhike

personally I really like your story, it wasn't what I expected thats for sure. I gotta I say like your writing, and your analogies a quite good. All you need ...

The guild: A Cavern of ice Why did I take this damn job? The chilling cold rippled inside the frozen cave we now sat in, my companion didn’t seem to ...

I like your characters,I see can see you've drawn them well together,and am looking forward to what happens next. I can't wait to see how you mold this story, and ...

I really liked this one, but I got to say you defiantly went twilight at one point, with the thing about the contacts. Personally I think that could draw a ...

well played jay leigh smith, i think your cliff hanger pretty interesting (purple eyes?). Out of the two I've read so far I say your writing starting to flow better ...

i justed wanted to say I'm impressed with your idea, it's the first time I've read a romance story and have no clue how it's going to end. I really ...

Grimoire book of the lesser key this was alot harder to write than my first submission, feel free to tear apart I sat up, images of what I just witnessed ...

personally I think your writing style is quite good, but your charcaters lack depth. The thing about third person view point is that all the characters will lack depth if ...

thx for the advice i'll reword as best i can and to explain I about the sword, it wasn't that it didn't make a sound, it's just that the demon ...

This is my first attempt be gentle, Chapter 1 the Truth "I am a great believer in luck. I find the harder I work the more I have of it.” ...

i"m new to writing, but I read a ridiculous amount of books, it's okay to disregard any advice I give you it's only my opinnion. Andrew is not truely hateable ...

I haven't read the first chapter yet, but I thought you did fairly good job, the characters came together well, and I think you put alot of thought into how ...