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I like the unconventional structure, but I think you relied on it a bit too much. Like you meant to spotlight the structure but lost imagination in the actual description ...

Thank you so much. I'm glad you understood the tone, it means I conveyed what I meant to. As for the beginning there actually WAS a part detailing the walk ...

Thank you both for your comments. That word skipping was intentional, not that I specifically wanted to NOT say "that," it's just that the sentence was meant to be as ...

Young love is pretty damn close. It's about a former best friend, but, yeah, it's almost exactly the same emotionas young love. The kind of naive snapshot quality, you know? ...

Thanks :) I actually wanted to keep it all lowercase because it conveys the feeling of youth. And I'll read it over and take a look at those lines and ...