bethanyoverload

Thankyou guys. Your advice has helped me and I am starting to get better. I hope I see you two around some time. ~'~Beth~'~

As I wake A tune so sweet Sparkles in my mind Pen and paper can not capture The joy of music The rhyme of sound And the happiness I feel ...

Very interesting. It describes the moods of the holidays nicely. Good job!

Heh Heh. I can taist them! I really think its cool that you decided to write about food.

*speackless* Aw.That was a very touching poem. I loved it. I have nothing against it.

To Love To love... You need a hope that never dies The courage inside A wonder that strives A hand to hold, On a roller-coaster A shoulder to cry on, ...

It was a good poem all though i think that you needed to support it more.

Wow! Now that was a very good poem, you should keep doing what your doing!

The poem was ok. I think to make it better you should add more descriptive words then "awsome" and "boring". Good Luck!

yes,you two are so vwery right. im sorry, and i have changed to the url to the site and added my favorite part. thank you for the help!

Ok so what you do is i write one line then you continue by writing another line. And so on.... As the midnight moon shone....(please continue)

if you havent read this, read it now. this is my favorite poem. i think thant many others will enjoy this too! I belive that my favorite part is when ...

that was an over all good poem. though i have a question about your icon, How do you know the guys name was "dave"???heh heh ,j/k i had to say ...

This was a nice change, now-a-days no one even mentions that God is up there...some where

i think that trident makes a good point also. but the over all writing was ok