bella4lifevur

I thought is was hooking the reader the whole time. Also, nice wording.

I watch the sky Roll over me And feel the ground Move under me I enjoyed this part especially. Of what you mean. It was very outgoing

I felt your passion and what i think you thought when writing this. As a summer's love Crumbles in the wind Very... creative... shows you are out not cramped in ...

Love is confusing. It can destroy your life forever. You could be happy or devastated with love. People can have a better life or job without it. It can complete ...

I felt you put work in it I saw nothing like big wrong with it. Change things if you want but I like it the way it is.

I loved it. You have such passion however; remember not to change from 3rd person to 1st person sometimes.