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Read my prologue and Chapter 1 first Chapter 2 The clock strikes 3:00 in the mourning and Alastrona awoke. She could hear the snores and cries of other patients, with ...

Well you'll get it later I want rewrite most of my chapters and turn it into like i'm narriating it. So it will be 3rd person and If you still ...

Okay thanks for your honest opinion. And when you think something shouldn't be there you'll get it later in the book. So remember something that doesn't make sense now. Makes ...

Well In my book Like the Getting in my car felt like I was going to die or be reborn at that moment. Goes with the “You gave us a ...

This is what I rewrote Forget the old one. I changed a lot(i think). If I were you I would read my prologue first. How I see my characters. Alastrona ...

WOW!!! It just gets better and better. I love the What if I never speed? Shall I straight yield to despair, And still on sorrow feed That can no loss ...

Absynthe! Still in love with it. I repeat you are an "Out of the box" Writer. I'm enjoy more and more you need to bring it all to school and ...

I'm still enjoying it. but you need to be careful when typing you spell somethings wrong sometimes. Other wise on to your next chapter

Well I enjoyed it completely. You have a very like "Out of the box" Imagination. However; as many people find things wrong I can read anything and like it as ...

I enjoyed it, it was showing a point. I liked it

Thanks I'll take your tips. And Sorry about the ___(n) My friend has a good name and wants me to use it so I put that until she found it.

MidnightVampire you'll get this but it's n ot exactly like yours but you'll get it. If you don't get it go to my portfolio and read mt story. Name: Alastrona ...

I enjoyed it. You were very creative. and the way you write through me off at first because it's different then the way I'm writing my book. However; I got ...

What do you think I want people to be harsh if they have to. And ___(n) means I need a name for that Person/thing. PROLOGUE In a powerful land, three ...

Well I enjoyed it even thought I don't really like Spring but your A,B,A,B C,D,C,D E,E. You did a nice job