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Kalliope-I thank you as well! I'm taking some time now to put more plot into the first chapter, because it was very filled with description, and not alot of action! ...

Nichola-thank you so much for all your corrections! I posted the revised version of Like Walden in the same place as the old one, so you can check it out! ...

Her arms were wrapped in his as they said goodbye… Remy wiped away a tear that created a trail down to her chin and stood staring into his hurt eyes. ...

Ok I really loved the openness in this poem, and the above critique was pretty harsh in my opinion. We're not here to judge this writer's life, just her work. ...

Hello turtle Stepping lightly upon the wet peat Surrounding the pond Careful not to slip Little turtle…. For falling on a slippery slope Even your hard shell will not save ...

Thank you lilchoma! And I certainly agree, saying those words with a british accent makes them sounds 30.000 times better! I laughed out loud when I read that! Also, I ...

Turmoil Like a sunken ship The sides caved in Like sallow cheeks Gaunt and lifeless Gone are the days Of high seas Braving the wind Cascading the white caps Traversing ...

Of a monster, My fear, Knowing that everyday, It’ll be here. Wow. This evoked so much emotion in me-its rather unfortunate that you blame yourself for your father's passing, which ...

Then again maybe it’s a good thing Now you don’t have to see my tears caused by the shit I put up with Now you don’t have to see the ...

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The leaves laugh as they go to a new place. Can the wind do that for me? Can I blow somewhere else, somewhere where I can get away? I found ...

Be seated, come off your ivory tower. Standing over me at my desk, To gain the high ground. This was my favorite stanza-it shows the teacher's quise of faux power ...

[quote="] You are so provocative, you can have anything. You are my first, and I really don’t mind if you are my last. Teach me how to do it, tell ...

Shaking nervousness This must be what it’s like When you can like without Regard To feelings Or time Or space Or rules The like of like A clear chasm of ...

Like a gleaming star unafraid of darkness, A solo fighter defending its ground, I must look inside and find the will, Stand up for my inner light to radiate out ...