beccalicious94

This is such a powerful piece. Your use of dialogue to capture the characters emotions is extremely well done. Keep up the wonderful writing! :D

I really liked the theme of the poem. The only thing that made me a little uneasy was the punctuation of the first stanza-- the colons and the ...s slightly ...

I really like this poem! I'm a little confused about the tenses though because you write "had exist" and then "had been broken", "tried", "break it" so I am not ...

This poem is so cute! Although you definitely know what is coming, I think it is one of those feel-good happy-ending poems the hopeless need to hear every once in ...

In my honest opinion, it sounds like an intelligent rambling three year old. While I understand the motivation for posting it, to illicit a response from YWSers about your prodigee-like ...

Preface: This is a personal essay I am writing for admissions to university. According to my guidance counselor, and earlier essays I posted on YWS, are not suitable for the ...

I really loved this piece. It was very informal, and that was comforting in a way. I could totally relate to having crushes on boys who didn't even have me ...

They are all amazing pieces! If I had to guess which one you submitted I would probably say either number 2 or 4. I'm writing a few college essays myself, ...

Very cute poem! I think the message is great as well. The one thing that bugged me was the rhyme scheme. It was annoying to get through because some parts ...

Preface: This is a personal essay I am writing for admissions to university. According to my guidance counselor, and earlier essay I posted on YWS, The Trichotomy of Me, was ...

Goodbye Stranger They say blood is thicker than water but not blood I never knew I had Where were you for all those moments when I was desperate-needing you-sad? You ...

Little comments: was a boy should have a period after it, thus beginning Her boy. It was a well written piece I will say that. If I may, I think ...

I really loved this piece. Comments: there were some awkward phrases like your fictional sport--cute but kind of out of place. Why does "The ground" get its own line twice? ...

You definitely "brewed" a laugh from me.

Preface: This is a personal essay I am writing for admissions to university. According to my guidance counselor, and earlier essay I posted on YWS, The Trichotomy of Me, was ...