beccalicious94

Quite the interesting haiku, not so many of them on YWS. What I took away from this piece was you telling your mum that you will make it through, plain ...

This is probably my favorite poem on YWS. I can relate to it so much. I usually dislike the nature motif, but I know personally I can never sleep at ...

Spelling/grammar: "rows" should read "row" in the third paragraph This was a really well done piece. I like your use of showing rather than telling, and use of vivid, descriptive ...

I really like this poem. It's succinct, but I understand exactly what you are trying to say. The only thing that was a weird read was "But constantly eludes my ...

Preface: This is a personal essay I am writing for admissions to university. In this essay I really wanted who I am to come out, and I hope it did. ...

Spelling: "cloths I had already picked" should read "clothes", "to boring to deal with" should be "too boring to deal with". When you describe the car as "old" it is ...

This is definitely dramatic! In terms of poetry, I have never really seen someone be as liberal with a rhyme scheme as you have (there really isn't one), but in ...

Preface: This is a personal essay I am writing for admissions to university. In this essay I really wanted who I am to come out, and I hope it did. ...

I really liked reading this piece, it made em feel warm and fuzzy inside. You have a great manipulation over language and beautiful imagery. I particularly liked the line "I ...

Spelling issues: The Zac in "Zac and Cody" is actually spelled Zack (don't ask why I know this). Chics is also spelled "chicks" since chic is usually a word to ...

“Do you see that stoplight?” exclaimed Hal as I was driving down Bell Boulevard for the first time. “I didn’t see it,” I timidly responded with my hands shaking at ...

I like the use of the snake as a motif for human's nature to easily give away trust. I would say this accurately describes fragility in under 150 words. I ...

Addiction Just one more sip I promised myself as the fiery burgundy liquid swam down my throat. Okay, well one more should really do it. Ah ha! Numbness. Exactly what ...

I really enjoyed reading this poem. It has a very nice flow to it and rolls off the tongue. You use very nice sensory details and I can feel emotion ...

This is a very interesting poem. I had a few issues with line 5-- it just doesn't sound well to me. Is line 6 supposed to read "a heart in ...