beautifulrelic

This was good and grabbed my attention right away! But, I'm not sure about the part in italics before the majority of the writing. I like it as a summary ...

This was a good work, but I found a few more errors. In the first three paragraphs, after people talked, you capitalized the next word, but it wasn't a name. ...

This was filled with so much imagery that I could felt like I could touch and see everything that you were describing. I noticed that the stanzas followed a pattern ...