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some people really have zero subtlety. a guy used this one on me: hey, babe, i believe in safe sex and all that, y'know?

i had a french vanilla cappaccino , and a egg/cheese/sausage biscuit. 4 hours ago. planning on french fries for lunch.

on the flippant side, a good haircut. i absolutely hate it when guys who look cute have a sick haircut. *leans over desk and pukes*

new balence, currently. nothing else works for walking on concrete 9 hours a day. haha *groans and rubs feet*

mothers who can't decide on what color she wants the kitchen counter to be!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :evil: and to think we have the whole fricking kitchen left to do!!!!!!!!!! I am going ...

You have some very good points, Reichieru. I was reading YA books when i was 10 for crying out loud, but there are some YA authors I still read because ...

ok, compliments.... niteowl is very funny, and i love her avator. :D

Man, that is sick and twisted....but it is funny :lol:

overall, i really liked it! great imagery, and i loved the line about a lover's sweet sweat. the only thing that sounded not so good was 'coaxed the last gasp'. ...

really good read! i especially liked 'rainbow painted dreams float softly heavenward' great job! :D

a very interesting piece. i like your rythmn, but agree that the last line needs something done to it. other than that, great!

I've read all your chapters, and I'm still wondering what time period is this??????? First they sound like 1800's, then it sound like late 1900's, then you switch again. very ...

Are you really going to care How you died? If you're already dead? It doesn't make sense To worry so much. I did. High school, boyfriends, PMS. College, marriage, finances. ...

I agree: this is great the way it is. I especially liked, 'Find for me my wick of truth, my center, my pool of yellow.' great job! :D

Not bad; I liked your second stanza, the wording flowed very nicely. :)