barefootrunner

I liked the first, almost-structured stanza, then a complete collapse of all control and a torrent of rage, disappointment and incomprehension running through the poem. The stanzas were good, but ...

This is a highly motivating poem! The rhyme that you used was great. I liked the fourth stanza, it followed a "bang bang bang crash" kind of pattern, which is ...

Poor Dylan. This story is interesting, but full of strange mysteries. Who was Dylan? What was to happen to the narrator? Who was the narrator? I am a bit confused. ...

I liked the shape of the poem -- this seems silly, but it was in blocks... like chocolate... You described that helpless sensation of the Chocolate Crave so well, I've ...

I really liked the way that your engaged every sense in this poem. This is something that many poets somehow neglect -- they focus on touch, sound or sight. I ...

This is a really good piece -- I can't complain in any way: No typos, no spelling mistakes... It is all so sad. I loved the mood, the way you ...

Yay! I really enjoyed the story and the characters were built perfectly. The only part that bothered me a bit in this chapter, was the start. It felt as though ...

This prologue is intriguing and ominous, with fantastic character mixed in! I already like Gerald. There were isolated typos which I'm just going to go over, but your writing style ...

LadyPurple seems to have got all the spelling mistakes, but I like the story itself. The hopelessness of the girl's life is mirrored by your writing style. I really liked ...

This is so sad, mysterious, beautiful and misty. I sat sighing afterwards, pulling my mind out of this world that you have created. This was simply magical to read. I ...

I like the direction this is taking -- it gets more complicated! Now I want to know more about the world that they are in and what's going on. Why ...

That's so cute! I love the new depth to the story and Freki is adorable! The story is very realistic, well reasoned and clear. This is so beautiful - if ...

This is beautiful! Such imagery, I love the peace... I'm also not a usual romance customer, but to me, this looked well-written and I fell in love with it! It ...

Amygabb, you are a poet! This was great! I could really empathise with the narrator! I keep using excited bursts of exclamation marks! This said what I wanted to say ...

I like the sense of mystery about this poem, but there was something bothering me. You seemed to be attempting half-rhyme, maybe even meter in the first few lines, but ...