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I owe you a more indepth critique: for now, my niggle is the structure of the second stanza, which seems to get a little messy toward the end. Your rhythm ...

I'm really, really tired right at the moment, so I'll promise to come back later. For now, ask yourself the question while you ponder revisions, why did I put the ...

An interesting poem, worgs, though I can't really agree totally with the previous comments. Anyway, that's beside the point, on to the poem itself; technical issues to begin with. Rhythm ...

It's often useful to allude to other people's work in your own, and I don't think that exact quotes, in a context like this, constitutes plagerism. My approach is usually ...

Rhythm - 9, 8, 8, 8 syllables: awkward. The first one dictates the tone, and then the rest are something equal but differing - sort them out somehow. Meter - ...

Whatever happened to Baby Jane, eh? :) I'm with Jack - it certainly seems like the opening to something longer to me, not a complete piece in itself. Onward, Critting ...

"Houston, we have a problem." That problem is that this isn't really anything. It's three sentences that say 'a boy jumped off a wall', effectively. There really isn't any point ...

Don't worry about the first line - if it's not a direct quote, you just have to hope that people will pick up the reference for themselves. To be honest, ...

Alrighty, lass, we'll get down to business. Firstly - never, never, never do this: ?!?! Putting a question-mark and an exclamation-mark together is something that's very rare in professional writing: ...

Same for me - there are some comments I'd like to make, but this is a placeholder for my critique, and a point to say that on first read, it ...

So - here you have a very short poem. Not only is it short, but the first two (two, not one!) lines are not your own. So, that leaves you ...

I note that at this moment you have 666 points - how appropriate. I (kind of) understand the idea, but... just no. I'm afraid it just doesn't really work on ...

Hello there. Firstly, rhythm! Where is it? Your line lengths go 13, 7, 7, 10, 7, 5, 6, 11, etc. sybllables long. Problem is, that just isn't conducive to poetry ...

I know this is prose...but I don't think we have a prose forum. It's 'Other Fiction', gummy bear. Or 'non-Fiction', of course, depending on your subject matter. Personally, however, I ...

When writing poetry, there are certain questions that should be asked at the beginning and end of the writing process, as well as all the way through. Chief among those ...