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Its sinple, but cute. Nice work!! :] Keep it up...

Wow, very nice. Its so true but yaah sometimes it is sad. This is a peice of wisdom that everyone should listen to. Keep it up! :]

The ground is moving Beneath my feet. How much longer can I stand? Most others have already fallen Into the mouth of the earth, Never seen again. How much longer ...

:] nice...I like this. keep it up! :]

Nice, very nice for 2 minutes. I do think that it would be a little better if you extended it. made it a little longer. but its good. keep it ...

Well, if it is your first time writing, as Elinor had said, then you did well. But it would be better if it was put into stanzas 'cause then you ...

Aww! lol. This is very good. Most people try something like this and it turns out completely cheesy. But you did well. Keep it up! :)

Well, I must say I love the first verse. It -like others have said- made me want to read more. That would be one awesome world. (: And even though ...

Thanks for the comments. And I guess it didn't cross my mind to seperate them into stanzas. But I see how it could've helped. Thanks again for the encouragements. :)

thank you, I wasn't really sure about this poem at first honestly. But thank you for the encouragement...:)

Hey, I think this is pretty good. I admit it is kind of depressing, but I've read alot of depressing poems. So yaah I guess its best that not all ...

Very nice. Very descriptive. Very good!! ha ha....I don't think those thoughts would've crossed my mind in describing the sky, but you made it work. :) Keep up the good ...

Hey there, I really like this piece. Its very well put. I'm not good at spotting out the wrong I'm just gonna say It is really good. Keep up the ...

All I see is broken Over and over. I can hear their heart break With every word made. Its hard not to cry When you can see their lives, In ...

Close your eyes And listen. Listen to the vibration And the melody combined. If you pay attention, You can hear Each string... Singing. The solo is great As the pick ...