babygirl12

Once again i see where the changes could be....thanx for the encouragements also...:) and of corse i will keep writing =P

Very nice. :) I like it.

Honestly I'm not a good critique at all... but I am for sure that this piece is amazing... there could be changes as the others above me have already said.... ...

Very interesting...:) and well I'm not the best critique all! but i like this...:) keep it up..

Its really good..:) keep up the good work..

Dang, this is really good. Its very descriptive (I think that's how you spell it) Its very good... I love it when it much inspiration... ha anyways ... keep up ...

I thought it was Horton not Hector. Ha, but about the poem....its really nice. It has the best description of the rainy season I've ever read. Dang! Well considering I ...

Ok I'm sorry silented1 but ..uh...she's mainly right..:P hahaha not all boys are like that but all boys CAN be like that..:P (girls can too btw) its a nice piece...ha..keep ...

Aww...I couldve sworn a tear came to my eye as i read this.... youve got talent....seriously...:) keep up the good work..:D and i was surprised to see that you were ...

Thankyou so much...:) this was actually an anssignment....then again i did it on my own free will...but i had the subject picked for me...and the word i was write about ...

The pen hits the paper Gently and daintily Writing the words Of a little girl's heart. It roams the lines As above tears fall Smearing the words Of the pen's ...

Wow...umm...well this is my first year...although ive been here for a while...ha and ive never signed a yearbook even though this one is on the enternet...its still my first..:) well ...

Dang... talk about a bad dump... i would've hated to be that girl... poor her...

Why do we try to justify ourselves To say we were right When in reality We were the ones that were wrong?

Dang...if only everyone listened to those two lines.... how different this world would be.. :) very good...