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Re: Horse Racing? Help!
My MC lives in the country and runs some stables. They buy a particularly fast horse, discover the horse's talent and are eager to race it at the tracks nearby. ...
Feb 24, 2012 -
Re: Rainbow
Thanks for your post, and yeah there are more colours to come! This is just a little snippet, I just wanted to put it on and see what sort of ...
Dec 10, 2011 -
Re: The Orphanage Boy
This is a really emotional piece, very descriptive of the pain the MC is going through, well done ! Think someone picked up on this in a comment before- about ...
Dec 10, 2011 -
Re: Cadet Challenge Chapter One: Meeting the Characters.
I'm getting that this is a military school, and I like the description, and the way you let the reader know what the character is thinking... Some grammar and spelling ...
Dec 10, 2011 -
Re: Black and White
This is really good! shiney1 pretty much got the key points- the things you've done well- so I just want to add that you have done a really good job ...
Dec 10, 2011 -
Re: Rainbow
I've already written this story and I've been trying to edit it, please review and try to give constructive criticism Red Rowan glanced into the mirror in the dark, cramped ...
Dec 10, 2011 -
Re: Smile, honey - you'll get sunshine.
This is really good, very sweet and captures your attention right away. I love the innocence- the imaginative reasoning of a little girl and the conversation between her and her ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: Seeing Silence
It's a really good piece of writing, I love the way you manage to say so much in only a couple of paragraphs! I only have a few tiny critisisms, ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: Welcome New Members! [2]
Hi! :D I'm new to this site, but it seems really cool, plus everyone seems so nice and genuinely helpful when it comes to writing and giving critique. That's probably ...
Nov 21, 2011 -
Re: Crystal Clear - Prologue
This is a really interesting first start! I could not find any faults with it, and have got to say I love the tantalising ending, I so want to know ...
Nov 20, 2011
