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  • Other Poetry Re: Voices In My Head

    Don't say you're not crazy really, because we all know that's not true. You're just a certain kind of crazy. Are you here referring to conscience, though processes, or something ...

    May 25, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: The Price Too High.

    I've got to say, your proofreading skills (or lack thereof) are starting to bug me a little, but that's probably just my OCD talking. Either capitalize the first letter of ...

    May 25, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: A Dirty Job

    I remember reading this a while back, and at the time I though you had a point. I still think you have a point, but I'm not really sure what ...

    May 25, 2009
  • Other Poetry Re: Sinner's Gamble

    Well, I'm sure you know exactly what I have to say about the subject matter of this poem, so I'll skip that for now. As a piece of literature, I ...

    May 25, 2009
  • General Articles Re: An essay about hurricane Ike

    A few general rules to help with any kind of writing: 1. Avoid "to be" verbs. There is always something more descriptive that will sound better. - Avoid the passive ...

    May 25, 2009
  • General Articles Re: An essay about hurricane Ike

    A few general rules to help with any kind of writing: 1. Avoid "to be" verbs. There is always something more descriptive that will sound better. - Avoid the passive ...

    May 25, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: Pressure

    The first line seems to be in disjunct with the rest of the song. As with any piece of writing, the beginning introduces it. At the first line it seems ...

    May 19, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: I Will Worship You

    (verse 1) I could never ask for more than you have given me; The Son that you adore you sent to set me free. I love you more than life ...

    May 18, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: The Angel's Lullaby

    It is very interesting. I haven't really got anything new to add in the way of criticism, but I am curious about the fourteen angels. What was your inspiration? Why ...

    May 18, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: Lost in the precipice.

    This is kind of sad. I always like happy endings, but this one is good anyway. It's moving. A little confusing, but I understand you are translating from another language, ...

    May 18, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: The Ballad

    (verse 1) I have a story to tell you About a once upon a time: A man lived his life for the day He would die. He gave his everything ...

    May 18, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: Love is pain

    I like this song a lot. Though I am only reading lyrics, I can feel the rhythm and the flow of it. As always when anyone writes that there is ...

    May 18, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: It is ten of evening on the city clock

    I agree that it seems a bit short, but I can assume that the guitar part would add something. One thing I would like to suggest, though I know that ...

    May 18, 2009


No spring nor summer beauty hath such grace as I have seen in one autumnal face.
— John Donne