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Hi! The type of feedback that I want for this piece is: Any words/phrases/sentences that seem out of place or confuse you in any way. Anywhere that I need to ...

Any comments welcome, especially on things that confuse you! This is the second part of my first chapter. Enjoy! ---------- [EDIT: compleatly re-done] Friggin heck! I jumped, suddenly contempt on ...

PLEASE REVIEW!!! RIP IT TO SHREADS PLEASE!! All reviews welcome. chapter 1 and prologue availible Here: Prologue Chapter 1 part 1 Chapter 1 part 2 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

HELLO, THIS IS THE NEXT PART OF MY BOOK, SPLIT PPERSONALITIES (OPEN TO A NEW TITLE!!) ENJOY! I was snapped out of my reverie by a tap tap tap on ...

It was like watching a horror movie. Sitting, watching, and relaxing. But at the same you’re terrified. It’s dark and stormy night, thunder thriving in the background. A reprehensible mass ...

Hi, This is my prologue, compleatly re-woked and such! I am sorry if I missed out any one of your comments, I tried to make this as clear as possible. ...

Hi, second part of my prologue, there will be three parts I think... * * * After leaving the block last, only two had followed me, but they were faster ...

Hi, third part of my prologue! Once I reached the top, I raced back through the corridors that I knew as well as the back of my hand. It was ...