astrogemini

My blood boiled. My heart tried to squeeze out between my ribs. My knuckles tightened on the branch until they were white as sheets. I wasn’t breathing. With narrowed eyes ...

Time limit... Way to leave us in suspense. So far this is shaping up to be my favorite chapter. No complaints as of yet. We'll just have to wait until ...

Glassjaw dude, Thanks for the compliment, it'll be a while before I get anymore put out for the reason pointed out so eloquently and subtly by crazyhat. But thanks still, ...

Funny thing is I wrote it before I saw the movie or Firefly. I'm making the appropriate changes so that's not the case anymore. So I have alot of revising ...

I like your writing, it's really powerful. It's pure and free and I don't know what I'm talking about, but I really liked it. It was really good.

I found no mistakes, but I wanted to comment anyways. I'm not the best at reviewing, but I'll give you my honest opinion as a man. That was pretty cool. ...

She was starting up the ship. She gave me her phone number, it’s not like she owed me or I expected her to take me home with her, but this ...

“Damn, he left me,” I said. But at the same time I was a little preoccupied. “Long time no see Liz…or should I say…” Vincent was about to blow my ...

I jumped the gate and I was tired. I had my orders, and I was told about a competing agent but never expected direct interference, by the Organization. I was ...

I left Matt’s. I knew I wasn’t supposed to be out this late, but then again when wasn’t I up and/or this late? I climbed through my window just in ...

This chapter was better than the first, and you left it off at a good point, I really want to see more.

I don't usually like short stories, but yours is really cool. I'd like to see more, it's an interesting little story. Keep up the good work. --Greg.

Maybe it should be an introduction instead.

The vamp collar is a short turtleneck only the zipper goes all the way up, so that when you unzip splits in two. And a zip up is just a ...

Yeah, commas never were my best friend, but I'll try harder.