ashleylee

Okay, that makes me feel better! :D But yeah, I caught that in there about Chase but I still wasn't sure about that... PM me when you post the next ...

Perriwinkle: Thanks so much for your review! I will definitely take all your suggestions into account when I remake this. I know this needs work and so, I hope soon ...

Conrad Rice: Thanks for your review. This was a total experiment piece. I was trying to work with a short story view because normally, all my stories are super long. ...

Ooooh, the chapters just keep getting better and better! :D This one is my favorite so far. Again. It had a good flow to it and I liked how you ...

Kelsey: Okay, I will. If I can't print it out tonight, I will soon! Promise! :D

First, I agree with Snoink that you need to come up with another idea besides the reason that Dan likes her because of her eyes. I think going the intelligent ...

Hey, thanks to both of you for critiquing! :D Perra: I took your advise and changed all the things you said. Hopefully, it makes more sense now! Also, this is ...

Oh, this is MUCH better. You answered all those questions I had been wonering about from the last time I read it. Great Job! PM me if you continue (and ...

Okay, first, you need to post your second piece in a seperate page so people know you have two parts here. Now, I only found one thing and that was ...

I thought your perception of vampires was right on! I have no bad comments to make. All I have to say is that I am on to part two! Good ...

This was nice. I agree with astrangedbeaR that the first two lines are kind of confusing. But you do really express your love for this person! Whoever receives this should ...

Yeah, I think you should post these seperately or using little waves or symbols inbetween to signal different parts. It's too hard to tell if you've added more if you ...

Interesting and creative. This was really unique. I don't think I've ever come across something like this before. But good work all the same! :)

You write really well :) This was a really good poem. I thought it flowed really nice and gave me a good sense of what the poem is about! Good ...

Wow. This was very moving. You write REALLY well. Those people at the magizine don't know what they are missing! Great Job! :)