ashleylee

All I did was copy/paste your story. All the corrections are in bold. The night was pitch black, the only light around were the beams that emitted from his head ...

Gosh, Elliot has finally blurted the news to SOMEONE! I was wondering how long it would take for that guy to spill the beans. And Daniel, will he ever wake ...

How sweet! :D I absolutely love this story! You are a talented writer! It was as if the night time had simply erased any terrible event from the previous day; ...

Umm….wow. Wow wow wow…I really have no other word to explain your piece. Your descriptions and comparisons were beyond anything I have ever read. You used words to describe things ...

Wow. Such a powerful ending. :D I only noticed a few things so I’ll do those first. In his position, he could observe the goings on in Market Square without ...

I agree with clograbby...I can find absolutely NOTHING to correct. Everything is flawless and flow wonderfully. The Ending: superb The Characters: all worked out in the end. However, I would ...

Good good good :D Only one thing again: But then, in the midst of it all, she had stopped dreaming. She’d stopped dreaming and could see nothing but past or ...

Okay, wonderful. Nothing extremely wrong that I noticed. I only have on suggestion. He exuded nothing but elegance and disillusioned grace—he did as the Romans did, questioned nothing, and smiled ...

I am going to apologize ahead of time for such a small review but I do have a reason: I found absolutely nothing to correct No grammatical errors or spelling ...

Umm...this was sooo sad :cry: Seriously, when I first started reading and found out what your characters were going to do, I thought I would simply HATE this piece. I ...

I only noticed one thing in this chapter: She was what I was supposed to be fearing? I think just plain “fear” instead of “be fearing” would fit better. But ...

Interesting. :D Let me get the individual stuff out of the way first. Olivian grinned as her grandmother swept her in to a healthy hug. “Healthy hug”?? I didn’t know ...

Very sweet and romantic. Sondre is so lovable. I really grew attached to him :D Only a few errors I saw: “I’m going on tour,” I say straightening strap to ...

Umm…wonderful! :D For one, I simply love anything about Rome. I am writing a story set in this magical place as well :wink: But anyway, for another point, your use ...

This was a really humorous story. But it was real. Not many stories are like that anymore. You didn't beat around the bush when it came to things. The only ...