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Re: i travelled the world thirteen times over
The clumsiness almost helps this poem come to life. It was a very interesting read, it feels like its a conversation between two people! I rarely felt lost whilst reading ...
Dec 15, 2014 -
Re: As You Are
This was one of the most interesting reads I've had today. I love how you've really gone into detail with the descriptions, they aren't too in-depth, but it's literally just ...
Dec 15, 2014 -
Re: The Children's Game, chapter 1
The start of this was really interesting, I haven't seen much like it on here, its diverse, I like! The story however - I think it needed more time spent ...
Dec 15, 2014 -
Re: Shadowed Light: Chapter 1
These types of stories for me aren't usually my favorite, but this had me hooked! You really captured the feeling and you've created this amazing image in my head that ...
Dec 14, 2014 -
Re: Crazy guy~part one
I think with this, you really had the chance to create something good, but it just didn't flow for me, which I felt really disappointing. I'm not going to be ...
Dec 14, 2014 -
Re: The Outbreak
I wanted so much more from this! Just adding in minor details and filling out the story would've made it much more enjoyable and seem less rushed. Try and take ...
Dec 14, 2014
