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This is pretty good, but you can hear that the rhyme was forced. It's really good other than that though. Keep writing, it's great!

(Note! I use the word "glowing" too much, I know! Also, the Guardians aren't all girls! The chapter's point of view varies. This chapter is read in the Lightning Guardian's ...

This is good. I can feel the emotion in it! " Wondering around this now untouchable world, we can leave no marks or traces Now we’re done, invisible, our lives ...

First of all, the poem is really long. I almost didn't want to read it because it looked too long. You might not want to put "Jewelry store owner" so ...

At first I wasn't really into the poem, but the more I read the more interested I was. It's good, but you might want to make the front a bit ...

I like the emotion and the feeling you put in there! It's great! There were good metaphors too. Keep writing!

Great! There's a lot of emotion in this poem. I like it! Keep writing, it's really good. You might want to change "despite" to "despise" It's great though!

The names are Japanese, but I have a reason for using them. For the 2nd chapter, I didn't use Japanese names. And also, the chapters switch point of views. It's ...

This is a great poem! I like the phrases you used. Don't be nervous about your works, their really good!

Great so far! There are a few mistakes though. But it's great. Keep working on it!

The Guardians of the Jrakkon Stone Chapter 1 The Water Guardian Splash! I dove head first into the cool, clear lake. The water felt like silk, brushing against me softly. ...