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Hey, thanks bugbug for the suggestions. I've tried adding more onto the plot and synopsis so hopefully that will make it easier for people to gather what's going on. I ...

changed this post so my 1st post had the extra story that was on this... Sincerity thanks for all your help. i never check over my work for errors like ...

Great feedback thanks guys, keep it coming!

Thanks for the feedback and your suggestions. I hadn't thought about doing it that way but i quite like your idea of doing it from both perspectives and shifting between ...

Just to set the scene - There are 3 girls on holiday together and they get bored in the huge hotel one night and decide to go exploring. I haven't ...