archer123

OKay well u really need to read the first oart in order to understand everything. I would have written more but I got too tired and couldn't write anymore. So ...

Thanks guys! That felt good to be complimented on something like that cuz on all of my other stories, people usually rip them to shreads. I thought about Romantic Fiction ...

Okay! I really like this story. The only thing I have to complain about is the last paragraph. The trasition was a little weird between "Finally Mom found me", and ...

Okay I made some corrections. I don't know if I got them all. Please let me know if I need to make more or just add on. What can I ...

It wasn't bad. There were some parts that I didn't totally agree with but I didn't dislike them enough to post them. Other than that, not bad!

I've edited the story so if you would please read over it again and tell me what you think!

I understand. But I'm not that good at it yet. This is only my first song I've ever written. I'm not to concerned about it. I would be more concerned ...

it was pretty good there were a couple of spelling mistakes, but other than that it was pretty good. There were some things that I didn't really agree wth but ...

it's supposted to be rasping, weezing sound.

Thanks. I will definitely rewrite this story.

I'm at a lose of words. All I can say is that it's wonderful. I wish I could write like that. There was really nothing to critique. you hit it ...

I thought it was really good. I would like to read more. :D