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Hi I'm apple :) Okay I don't write poetry but I do enjoy reading it. I loved the poem, especially the last few lines, but did notice that the capitalisation ...

I loved the tweet about seeing a three headed dog and it being normal!

I love this! It's such a cool idea! I especially liked the tweet about the previous tweet sounding wrong :)

Hi welcome to YWS I'm apple :) Right I did like this prologue because it drops the reader straight into the action and does leave them wanting more. However, I ...

No words can describe that piece of writing

I love it more than I loved the first chapter of this novel, and that was hard to beat! I didn't spot any problems which haven't already been mentioned and ...

More brilliant writing but I have to agree with the above comment by saying that much of this piece does seem to describe rather than to tell us how the ...

Hey I'm apple and I must say that I really enjoyed this piece. I don't have much to say about it because there were few (if any problems). The only ...

I actually really enjoyed this and I sooooo hope that you write more pretty please but anyways yeah i like the flow of this chapter because i think that it ...

Hey, I loved this piece and can't wait for the rest of it. I don't have much else to say about it apart from one thing which kinda bugged me ...

I agree with the things said above but I dont think any one mentioned something that I noticed when I read through it And a anxiousness to see This 'a' ...

I love it and definately think there should be a sequal/trilogy/however many you really want to write! I really liked the developement of the relationships between the characters. Well Done! ...

Beth turned the corner, her shoes held in her hand. She was far better off without them anyway. Stones scratched the soles of her feet and tears stung her eyes. ...

I like the story but I think they fall in love way to fast. I mean they don't know each other at all and their already kissing and walking each ...

I agree with Esther that you may have used I to much and could try to put a bit more detail in to it. I also really like the MC ...