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Re: Wet Flower
I wasn't trying to back talk, and I apologize if I came off badly, I'm just not used to such vague critiques and lack of suggestions. And I wasn't talking ...
Sep 14, 2007 -
Re: Wet Flower
You didn't explain to me how I "shoved it" in your faces, so I'd like a clearer understanding. And actually those two things are not what the poem is about, ...
Sep 9, 2007 -
Re: Wet Flower
A swaying blade ponders and rears (reflecting a divine heart-shaped face a widow’s peak slicing down forehead and looming over shells of white and blue) to crudely divide a sliver ...
Sep 3, 2007 -
Re: Delve into Forest, Descend to Fist
Unfortunately the entire poem would not work with a few of the trimmings; it's surreal style, and that's not debris, they're illusions. It's supposed to create a picture in your ...
Sep 2, 2007 -
Re: Thoughts of love
Poetry should not just be a clump of words. It should be artistic; it should make you SEE not READ. Show, don't tell. I read poems like this daily and ...
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: I'm Joe's Spouse
Yeah, well, you know... It's not a true writing site until Jerkface and me have arrived. ;) Oh yeah, because I do SOOOO MUCH writing and critting XD I wasn't ...
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: Say hi to me, because I am deserving of such greetings.
Joke? The pictures I found dropped on my lawn of me sleeping say otherwise
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: I'm Joe's Spouse
Yeah, well, you know... It's not a true writing site until Jerkface and me have arrived. ;)
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: Delve into Forest, Descend to Fist
Animal hide, stretched to seal the void and stained with cockroach inners and maroon hues, is stitched through with threads of rutted branch. Delve, I dare say delve, into the ...
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: I'm Joe's Spouse
Oh. It's you... I can be mean to you just because I've been on longer, making you newb to the hundredth power. :)
Sep 1, 2007 -
Re: Say hi to me, because I am deserving of such greetings.
Like it says. Anyways, my name is Ariel and I'm a writer, which makes sense seeing as I'm on a writing site, but in case that thought didn't cross your ...
Sep 1, 2007
