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Hmmm. Food for thought, indeed. I already have thoughts about giving it open–heart surgery... I guess I should mention that I did fail on purpose to mention she was a ...

Okay, okay, I'll have at it again. Similarity –mother figures show up in, whether implied or direct, in every poem/section. –relationships, especially nurturing the earth as if it is the ...

Thank you Evi for stopping by. I really appreciate the comments. I'll go send this through the laboratory again. I'm not sure how to make this more explicit, but Charlotte ...

Hey Navita, thanks for stopping by. It's a petty plot, really– the girl steals a ribbon as an act on revenge on the store that sells writing supplies, because she's ...

Thanks for the reviews. I fixed the first one's line (thank you Rune for pointing that out). As for the second one, I know the first three are liquids and ...

Thanks for the reviews. Navita– emo poetry, how perfect. I mean, Wuthering Heights, Edgar Allen Poe– I like ominous, morbid work. But yes, I get your meaning. :D I will ...

Heheh. Yeah, I knew this one had some duddy moments, but I couldn't put a finger on it. So thank you for pointing the problems out. So cliches and clarity ...

I have said this before (and my intent, believe it or not, is to avoid redundancy) that I will rework this piece in order to suit the directions your criticisms ...

Thank you Navita and Evi! I see (*cringes*) that there are several gray areas to be rehabilitated. Confusion was not my intent! :D I'll give it a rest, probably a ...

Navita: Whew. That was some review! But I'm so glad that someone took the time to actually read it. I understand that I had some rather ambiguous language in there, ...

Thank you Venturepants! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Hello again! I didn't mean to be vague, and I'm sorry for the confusion. Thank you for clarifying the origin of 'deceased mind'. Now I know that you were writing ...

Oops, sorry about the confusion: I didn't mean for that to be the main theme! Unfortunately, I don't have the time right now, but I'm thinking I may "spirit away" ...

Thank you for the feedback, everyone! I hope I sheared enough of the excess. Let me know if any other tweaking is required. Oh, and by the way, (Galerius, to ...

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