annaseale1998

I don't think I've read a more beautiful poem. This was absolutely BRILLIANT, and I can't think of a single way to improve it, because it's already so amazing. The ...

Really interesting. Is this part of a story? Or just scattered thoughts? Either way, it definitely grabbed my attention. I loved it, and I actually want you to write more!

Thanks for pointing out the typos, I changed them :)

Haha, that's really fun! It's nice to read poems that arn't about really serious things, like lost loves. I thought the rhythm could have been smoother in one or two ...

Is darkness the feeling of utter despair? Or the hollow chasm of a witch's lair? Does darkness hide in people's eyes And cause the words that we despise? Is it ...

I like how you've mixed normal, everyday stuff, like being 'somewhat-more-than-almost-friends' with more poetic things like 'jewels of the sky'. I thought it could of had a little bit more ...

I think this is brilliant. I love the rhyming scheme. The only problem was that in line three in the last verse, there's one too many syllables. Apart from that, ...

Thanks! The thing about 'got care' was a mistake (thanks for spotting that, I didn't realise). Really appreciate the comments!

I really enjoyed reading this. It really made me think, and it also had a great ending.

I thought it was pretty brilliant, and that you shouldn't change much if you were to rewrite it. I loved the idea and the rhymes were great, but maybe try ...

I really liked this. It was a little bit jumpy to read, and I couldn't quite find any rhythm, but the words you chose were brilliant. I love the subject ...

I thought you could have given it a better title, but I really liked the poem. Maybe end it with something about 'we've run out of time', because you've said ...

Books, books, they line my shelves With magical stories of faeries and elves With six-legged goats and space-flying boats To the subtle beaches and shells They tell of violet planets ...