annaseale1998

I espeicially love the opening and closing paragraphs, but mainly this: 'Everyone has a memory that they wish they could forget; a memory that haunts them every day. It can ...

This is really interesting. I loved the way you ended it, 'So bite the cold hard bullet of reality and ride the wave of Change.' That's really imaginative! Also, great ...

I love the first picture of the sunrise. You did a great job with the mushrooms, espeically the first out of the two! I loved how the shrooms bent over, ...

I like it, because how could the narrator know what they look like if they've never seen this person's face? I like the simplicity of it, but it's so short ...

Run away with me to Neverland Where everything shines, the sky, the sand Where pixies, they hide in your bathroom drawers And golden elephants roam the moors Run away with ...

I loved the title, brilliant idea having it backwards. The last two lines were my favourite, it really makes you think! Great work. -Anna

The problems with this is that you said 'a scary mutant ninja thing', and there is a lot of places that need some comas. Apart from that, it was quite ...

Great work. I really enjoyed reading it, and I loved the ending of the chapter. Keep it up! -Anna

I really enjoyed this! It was fun to read, and the ending was great. You really couldn't have ended it better. I struggled to understand what was going on, and ...

It was a little bit jumpy, and I would have liked it to rhyme a bit more - it wasn't constant. I liked the idea, but you need to work ...

Really imaginative. I would have preferred it to rhyme, because I generally like poems more when they rhyme, but I don't think the emotion and the feelings would have come ...

I liked this, although I thought it went on a bit. The rhyming and rhythm were good. It sounded like you were writing a poem based on a book, but ...

I really liked this. When I read it I was disappointed that it didn't rhyme (just personal taste) but when I got into it, I realised it just didn't need ...

I liked this, it really created a picture in my mind. The rhyming was good, but the only problem was the rhythm. It took me a while to get into ...

I really liked this poem. The idea was great, and so were the words. The only problem is that the rhythm isn't constant. The first stanza is very jumpy, because ...