angelfromsomewhere

I liked this one. Really, I do. Well done, you've really captured the characters. One tiny, tiny problem. "His sweet breath tickled on my skin." I could, possibly be wrong, ...

It's an interesting idea, but I agree with Kepe, it does need to be a lot longer. I'm not really seeing any new ideas. You have a great writing style, ...

Ah, this is just so adorable. You really capture emotion! I would love to give you some advice on how to improve it, but...I'm lost for words :!:

A girl kneels, crying in the rain, her silhouette perfectly shaped by the moonlight. She has her arms wrapped protectively around her shivering body. She gasps as the tears run ...