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Re: Spiric Frenzy
No no l gladly accept the crlticism lol l juzt came up wlth thlz today. It's supposed to sound weird I don't want to give away what he is talking ...
Aug 20, 2008 -
Re: Spiric Frenzy
Germaine stood on the front porch of a vacant house. In her arms weeping softly was Levin, her boyfriend of three years. “Please don’t cry. It’s okay you can come ...
Aug 19, 2008 -
Re: Welcome to Miami: Chapter 11.
Aaron always seems to be breaking Eve's heart. She needed to calm down and see it threw his eyes that was his 1st time cut him some slack. Couldn't find ...
Aug 19, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 12
I can Carmen stand, Michael already at the window, climbing down Somethings wrong with the wording here. Although you said there was no romance I'm guessing you ment between Sophia ...
Aug 17, 2008 -
Re: Please
It does need a lot of work :) Actually i made this for a fried to wake the em up to realty! Now that i look at it again it ...
Aug 17, 2008 -
Re: Please
( not my photo found on photobucket) Don’t let the troubled thoughts Seize you existence Gone from me, for an eternity I couldn’t breathe
Aug 17, 2008 -
Re: Evolution
Thank you and yes I was telling a story of a breakup. BTW found that pic on google.
Aug 16, 2008 -
Re: Evolution
Thanks for the suggetions I have no idea what you mean about A or B pattern. I just right poetry for fun. Just trying to get over some stuff so ...
Aug 14, 2008 -
Re: At what age did you start writing and
When i was 16 . A stupid mideval romance for my ex LOL
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: Where do you write?
In my room on my bed wlth labtop. Sometimes on my cell or notebook when i wake up at night sleepless.
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: Evolution
*Edited but tweaked suggesitons to my liking Peeling off the surface of my skin Showing the scarred tragedy within Arm feels numb Red streaks from healing undone Tears are plummeting ...
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: Now I wish I never knew you……
Thank you for the feedback. I have no more work on the sight though ( poems). That was written over the course of last night around 3am
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: Maelstrom
Can't find anything wrong here flowwed very well. Nice imagry and rythmic pattern.
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: Now I wish I never knew you……
My life the past few months.... Lonely Twisted thoughts And recollections What the hell is wrong with my mind? Insanity Flash backs of absurdity I dream of him And think ...
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: Dark storm of sorrow
l really dld love thlz poem. Because I can really relate to it because of my ex. And thats exactly how I feel like the feeling your poem portrays.
Aug 13, 2008
