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  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A night at the fair

    Thanks for the review. I'm happy you were able to receive it well! The points you suggested were able to make me realize that I could've been able to immerse ...

    Dec 4, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A night at the fair

    Thanks for commenting! Yeah, the person is at a fair, and I probably should've described it better. It's actually in a school, and the bench was in a hallway, but ...

    Dec 4, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A night at the fair

    Hi! Thanks for commenting. For that one line you were talking about, I was trying to make it seem like no one was able to make the person happy, but ...

    Dec 4, 2017


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