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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: How Lymuria Fell - Prolouge

    Hey there! Without the formalities and boring intros, let me get straight to it. The room was dark, as it always was had been , and as he he'd always ...

    Aug 3, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Has Ben, Never Was Chapter 6

    Hello there old friend :D Been a while, I've been looking forward to this chapter. I'll start with the corrections and my opinion at the end. loving the way it ...

    Aug 3, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Chapter 1: Irritum

    Hey there, You're story seems original and with an explicit plot. I am looking forward to reading the rest of it. I must point out to you though, you need ...

    Aug 2, 2011

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: My wife and the old Goat

    You're story is wonderful. It is pointless, but full of metaphors. Its shortness makes it even better. The final sentence was the best. On the other hand, I have quite ...

    Aug 1, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Pink Tassels; 150 words

    Hey there. Its a very well written story. No matter how short it appears to be, its quite alright. The metaphors you're getting through are quite clear to me. I ...

    Aug 1, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General
    Re: Destiny's Call: Chapter One

    Hey, its me again. The prologue brings me here I guess, so lets see :) As the they made there their as Thunderstorm approached his him slowly Here you either ...

    Jul 31, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General
    Re: Destiny's Call: Prologue

    You're story is original, and I loved it. Please excuse the corrections, but they were necessary. You'll need to work on better sentence structure. Picture the sentence in your head ...

    Jul 31, 2011

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: My Window

    Hello, You're poem is not only creative and powerful, it is original. The way you subliminally portray the idea of fighting to be childish is amazing. I had not looked ...

    Jul 31, 2011

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Creatures

    Well hello there! You're story is as wonderful as it gets. The plot is the perfect type; the one which leaves the reader wanting to have more. There is one ...

    Jul 30, 2011

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Spark

    Wonderfully constructed and very original, for me at least. Reading it at first I assumed what everyone would; its a person. I then realized that you were actually describing an ...

    Jul 30, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Has Ben, Never Was Chapter 5

    Where are you going with this!? You keep twisting the plot, taking it to a higher level. Beware Drunk, when you reach the top going back down will be hard. ...

    Jul 29, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Has Ben, Never Was Chapter 4

    Amazing! Absolutely wonderful work. The diversity of the colliding events is bewildering. You send my head into a buzz and shake it to sense repeatedly with the scenes. This is ...

    Jul 28, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General
    Re: An Innocent Dream - Prologue

    The prologue has everything a prologue should have; the mystery, the attractiveness and the ability to plant within the reader the will to read on. I will most certainly be ...

    Jul 28, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Has Ben, Never Was Chapter 2

    Wonderful! Absolutely wonderful! Your writing will not cease to amuse me, I have not come across a talent as pure as yours yet. The story took me right in, from ...

    Jul 24, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: That Night

    I swear to God, this had to be one of the funniest pieces that I have read in a long long time. Your lyrics are simple yet expressive and detailed. ...

    Jul 24, 2011


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