anabelsinclair

Hi Biscuits. May I call you Biscuits? Thank you for the R&R. I think my problem is being inside the character's head and writing like they 'think,' rather than as ...

Buggiedude, I will try to tone it down with the substitutions. Thanks for the R&R

Hey Deanie! Thanks for the R&R, and being the editor I cannot yet afford to hire. (I'll leave a note in the foreword). Definitely taken your pointers to heart and ...

Hi Kyllorac, Thanks for the read and review. Ah grammatical errors, the bane of my existence. I will smooth out the hiccups. For some reason, my line breaks did not ...

Hi Iggy, Many thanks for the review. You're right, it is a long chapter...I tried breaking it but for continuity's sake I had to just leave it as is. I'm ...

Hi IamTraunt, Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I will certainly take your suggestions to mind. :)

Thank you, MrGreen, you are too kind.

Hi Deanie, As usual, thanks for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate your your keen eye for detail; it will really help me improve this story as I fill in ...

Indeed I will! I see the edits...definitely getting there.

Hi Deanie! Thanks for all the awesome comments through out this work. Much obliged. I'll do my best to 'splain the 'splains... It is odd that it skipped Aubrey's mind ...

Hi Buggiedude, Thanks for the read and review. Yeah the end of this chapter always comes off choppy no matter how many times I go in to 'fix' it. The ...

Hi Lost, thanks for taking the time to read and review.

Hi Deanie! Thanks again for reading and reviewing. The sentence definitely reads better when shortened the way you suggested and I'll keep that in mind. Ditto with the extra word. ...

Thank you Deanie, for being so thorough in your reading and reviewing. I really appreciate you picking up on my errors. I'll work on them forthwith!

Buggiedude2340, I want to thank you for sticking with us thus far. 1. Yes it does beg the question, doesn't it? 2. Montgomery is a generic mid-west city America, dreamed ...