anabelsinclair

Hi Buggie, Happy New Year! Thank you for the R&R, your pointers are always appreciated. I believe I have a situation of 'too many women' but I'm working on tightening ...

Josie98 Nuff said, lol. Ill, as in bad, as in poor. Yeah, when I read it again, it does sound like too much is going with that sentence. I'll re-work ...

Buggie, Thanks for the R&R I'm glad you picked up on the italics; we are 'seeing' and experiencing the flashback of events through Allana's eyes. The other players just elaborate ...

Deanie, As always, many thanks for your read, review and conscientious comments. Your 'nitpicks' are greatly appreciated. Allana's dream state, we'll touch on that later. So also, Darrin's quirks.

Dear Deanie, Thank you for the always in depth review, and technical critique. Yes, comma splicing is something I've now realized peppers this work (thanks to you).1st POV is not ...

Hi Fallen! Thank you for taking the time to read and re view, I hope you stick around. :)

Deanie, Thanks for always delving deep and parsing neatly. it is interesting that you prefer reading from Allana's POV, as I find 1st person a challenge. It is actually going ...

Hello Haylstormsx, Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Hopefully the pace of the work will pick up from there on out!

Hey Deanie! Thank you, as always, for the R&R. I actually like the idea of threading Darrin's approach into the chunks of sentences as you suggested. It would increase the ...

Thank you, ThundahKnuckles, you are too kind. That was a mistake, which you noted, and I will correct it. This story was borne out of a challenge level me by ...

Oh myy, We all have our 'moments'. I liked this! I liked the randomness of the scene, which makes no pretenses about its randomness. There is just no b-sing your ...

Yo Buggie, Thanks for the R&R Got the nitpicks, working on the kinks. We're almost done (quick and painless, promise)

Hey Deanie, Thanks for the read and review! Muchly appreciated

Hi Deanie, Thank you for the R&R Space between ellipses ... got it? And commas. Actually the last quote had more to do with Aubrey's past experiences with the Sidhe. ...

Hey Buggie! As always, thanks for the R&R. You say my vocabulary makes you green, well I envy your attention to detail and grammatical skills.