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I think you should try to remember, every poem should have a rhythm, so that it flows nicely, and you can find that rhythm by deleting unnecessary words. When you ...

_ I don't think that you should explain what a tornado is, but explain more of what the story is behind the tornado, personify,to make it like a human, with ...

this was a good story, with a great twist at the end. You could maybe add some details, Her mother brought her meals. I think you could expand on this, ...

You could make it more real by adding imperfections. Just little things, like coffee rings on a table. I love the story so far though!

good job with the detail and developing your charactor, I look foward to reading more. “There’s a monster!” she was babbling, wringing her straggling hair. “A huge wolf, with terrible ...