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I don't entirely agree with the other person, I think your writing flows very well, there are characters, subject matter, lots of imagery. I can see the battle in my ...

I believe for a 14 year old your write rather well. :D Just make sure your not using the same word frequently and you should be good, Keep up the ...

I rather enjoyed it, excellent imagery, you know it's a good read when your mind fills with an interesting movie. :D I can't think of anything negative ponts, just keep ...