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I don't understand the lyrics or the Boy's POV It could be very interesting depending on the music. But maybe re-write some of the lyrics if the music turns out ...

Its a nice funny song that would be fun to record for fun. If you're making an album maybe have it as a bonus track but not on the actual ...

Interesting. The colors are very radical and highlighter bright

Lily of the valley was my favorite. Very pretty and spring ish Very earthy and innocent

Enter the first and third picture. Third picture first! the frozen water drop does stand out in this collection but i thought it was very cool. all the pictures are ...

I love nature photographs. I think you can see a little worm in the first pink rose picture. Ew lol I love the Summer 2009 coca cola photo! yay summer

"This is the exact poem I wrote for the love of my life when he had to move far away. " I love when writers give some background to their ...

I liked it. It was very pretty and it pretty much reached its goal: to be a pretty poem I agree with Mr. Pie, this line doesn't work: For winter, ...

I didn't like the song. I really didn't like the exaggerations because they seem very unrealistic. In this case you should write it containing more truth then exaggerating because it ...

The repitition of lines was annoying. They didn't work for me. I don't clearly understand what the poem is about but it seems like it could be much better if ...

I didn't like it but the topic was interesting and maybe you can go back to it if you want and fix it up. the rhyming is very weird in ...

It read very pretty. Nice Shakespearian language you used I don't get the 'stain' thing. The only line that stood out - Through storm, I'll love, through light and rain

Nice poem. Extra points for talking about the love before the heartbreak. The imagery you used was great I loved this line 'Eyes of the deep green forest I would ...

Mars that was a fine poem. I like that message of leaving but not really leaving. Its been becoming more frequent and yours is written well The imagery of the ...

(I wrote this influenced a little bit by "Fire and Ice" by Mr. Frost. and also by Andre Aciman's novel, Call Me by Your name ) SE L'AMORE. Hearts in ...