alohajuice

Hey everyone I haven't noticed this here before so this is my formal introduction! I'm a little late at this but don't be bothered. I am Alohajuice and I write ...

This whole stanza feels vague, shallow, and, it's kind of all over the place. My immediate reaction was "... what?" Part of it I think has to do with those ...

it kind of had a Colbie Callait (probably spelled that wrong... :)) vibe to it. I liked it. [quote="Babanuuk"]it reminds me of some indie, bluesy artists. Jack Johnson ish , ...

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I might be the first to say I love this! it has a youthful voice but is mature. I loved everything about it! "Besides, you taste like sunscreen and embarrassing ...

It was a nice story. It kind of did scare me just a little bit. Make it scarier! I did have a problem with it. "Luckily my hand was over ...

Thanks for the reviews. :) I like this, is the style rap??? Anyway you want to make sure you keep it far enough away from the songs that inspired it ...

Thanks everyone. I'll put more thought into editing if I decide to keep working on this. Any more reviews? That would be helpful.

the whole poem was tight but I did not fully understand what it was about. All I got was that this was about Tallgrass house. "sisters or brothers before Satan’s ...

It is a very pretty poem. Its not exactly polished but it does have an innocence about it that makes it stand out. This is good writing and i think ...

I don't believe that all poems need to have meaning. It was a nice reflection on oranges and i think it was an excellent poem having been written in middle ...

Everyone knows the saying "It feels so right when it's wrong." But what about "It feels so wrong when it's right?" Maryanne and I were on summer break in Greece. ...

It looks gothic; reminds me of The Grudge. Her position is creepy. It would be nicer if you could see a part of her eye, make it blue or green. ...

The peach tree blossoms are gorgeous. I like the mood of the second one, its gothic, but maybe add just a little more of the color back to make it ...