alohajuice

Oops type-o! sorry about that and i agree that it should have some explanation. i actually wrote it 'cause i wrote this story about a musician who falls in love ...

i think the whole idea to the song is very interesting and it sets itself apart from mainstream music. the idea of you singing a song, or praying to your ...

since other people pointed out the grammatical errors, i'll leave it out. but do brush up on your grammar. if you are from a foreign country, know that grammar is ...

If your intention with this poem is to make us "feel", well then you are successful because each line is charged with just enough emotion (with images to boot!) for ...

thank you for your reviews. who is Miss Mars btw? more reviews please!!! it would be great

What I thought went up were the clouds That made us blind, and scream, and fight But what came down was thunder when will the light come after this gray ...

paralyzed is spelled wrong. it has a y. not an i seems like a sweet, short and simple song it reminded me of don't forget by demi lovato. the coldness ...

Erm... it looks almost like you based this off of Twilight. Try making it a tiny bit more original, dear. Originality is always key. ergh. i shouldn't have named it ...

Savage green fields Wild herbs, musky pine Yellow daisies and forest thyme Farm pastures with the sweet apple trees Supple green leaves And bloodred fruit Pick the ripest ones But ...

u have to change 'made' to mad. the lyrics arent that bad. no line really pops in my head though. maybe i'd have to listen to it with the tune. ...

the title is a little confusing. and whenever you say 'to die a dream of death' breaths should be breathes. i liked ur use of the word 'sanctions' it gave ...

[i]A/N- Dragons are circling Now mermaids are singing i liked these descriptions. the whole poem was nice as a whole and dreamy feeling. there were def traces of fire and ...

I’ve searched far across the deepest forests, seas, and skies, For my heart’s biggest secret Your eyes are in Vistana, And my heart is chained to the ground It's beating ...

sweetly written and nice imagery. except it should be season's wonder :) its great and it feels true to summer but do trees actually blow? it doesn't seem to fit ...

it seemed weird to me using stale to describe your body. but it was a nice poem. it was a bit bare feeling. didnt bring much out of me. i ...